In class we have been working on improving our writing by using leads, show not tell, and trying to focus on the moment. In this discussion you guys are going to put it all together. Your assignment for the week...
Write the opening paragraph of your latest story.....the prompt is: Write about an unforgettable moment in your life.
remember: You do not need a vacation spot or a super fancy story to have a good moment. Some of our best moments happen in the most ordinary, everyday places!!
Use a lead, focus on living in the moment, and remember to S-N-T!!
You have all been doing an incredible job with these posts and I'm proud of all your hard work in making this classroom blog so wonderful and unique!
I felt a blast of cold wind as it went through my body. I saw this 3 story bilding size water slide. As I went down a blast of water went in my face and up my nose.
ReplyDeleteIt was a dark night and frog gigging season was up and 3 pound frogs were croaking in the night as me and my brother went in the high tall weads looking for frogs.
ReplyDeleteI was walking to the kitchen then I saw a rat eating chees for my tomrrows lunch. Then I got rat caching machien. Then I puched the on buttion .Then it start moving.The time it was about to caching the rat ran alaway. and the rat came back I was wondering why it came back. the rat took my chees .I was to angry that I even tell my mom
ReplyDeleteA small gentle wave crashed into the boat. I could smell the the saltyness of the sea as we crossed by every wave. When I looked down at the sea I could see little fish swim by us in the calm delicate sea coat.
ReplyDeleteI herd the father saying stuff to my baby niece and then i knew she was geting batised it was the best day of her life and of my life "she is now a baby of the lord" i herd the father say
ReplyDeleteAn unforgetable moment I have experienced was when I visited New Mexico.
ReplyDeleteMy family drove through Texas to New Mexico. It was the longest and most boring car ride I have ever had yet. I leaned hard against the seat hoing every second we would finaly arrive. It was dreadful because of how BORING it was. As we kept riding along the road, we came across snow along the plateaus. I was surprised that I was sweating hard even though that the snow meant that the tempature was freezintg. I colapsed harder against the seat, desprate for a stopping point out of our blazing hot white Suburban.
Signed, Justin Turet
Today i moved to a 12 acre rock covered with cement topped with bird turd and surronded by water. Alcatraz sits smack in the middle of the bay-so close to the city of San Francisco,I can hear them callthe score of the baseball game on marina green.
ReplyDeleteMy korea best freind and girl freind going to the play park.Play park has play tool i like viking.Viking is somthing scared but fun. but korean play park has squirrel tool is dizzy.so my girl freind and me don't like.Ilike play ground
ReplyDeleteBOOM! "Good job Botros " Coach Siccola said. 11 is out of cumision I thought.I was so glad I was on the mustangs.I looked at the score board the nittany lions were losing.
ReplyDeleteWhen I was 9 me and my mom were in the car to go pick up a dog named voilet and I was so scrunched up my knees touch my feet as i was pushing aginst the lugage and finally I pushed it back. we finally git there and just in time because i was about to whirl and we went inside an just as i got in I saw 1,000 little furry slobbery dogs they all went after me and they all jumped on me an started licking my face when in got up my face just got a clear coat. After my mom talked to the owner we left for home on the way there violet was sound asleep and didn't wake up until we got home when we got there she was ready to play but I wasnt it was so late i went to bed and that is an unfogetful moment.
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ReplyDeletei am atemting to name 15breeds of dogs chwaiiwa'whatwiler'poddle'jarmanshaperd'labador' pug'huskey'boxer'wenerdog'based hound'begal'blue helerdog'terreor dog'
i am john d. attempting the challenge of naming the 50 states Texas, Connecticut, Florida, California, Alabama, Alaska, Arizona, Arkansas, Colorado, Georgia, Hawaii, Idaho, Delaware, Illinois, Indiana, Kansas, Kentucky, Louisiana, Maine, Maryland, Massachusetts, Michigan, Nebraska, Nevada, New Hampshire, New Jersey, New Mexico, New York, North Carolina, North Dakota, Ohio, Oklahoma, Oregon, Pennsylvania, Rhode Island, South Carolina, South Dakota, Tennessee, Utah, Vermont, Virginia, Washington, West Virginia, Wisconsin, Wyoming
ReplyDeletei am john d. attempting the challenge of naming the 50 states Texas, Connecticut, Florida, California, Alabama, Alaska, Arizona, Arkansas, Colorado, Georgia, Hawaii, Idaho, Delaware, Illinois, Indiana, Iowa, Minnesota, Missouri, Kansas, Kentucky, Louisiana, Maine, Maryland, Massachusetts, Michigan, Mississippi, Montana, Nebraska, Nevada, New Hampshire, New Jersey, New Mexico, New York, North Carolina, North Dakota, Ohio, Oklahoma, Oregon, Pennsylvania, Rhode Island, South Carolina, South Dakota, Tennessee, Utah, Vermont, Virginia, Washington, West Virginia, Wisconsin, Wyoming
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